Sentences Reducing Strategies

Paragraph # 1: "Smart House".

Schenker, in her article "Smart House", houses will be networked making people´s life easier and more comfortable. The electronic devices will be connected to internet and have special chips to control housework, communications, shopping, bills or people´s social life. The disadvantages of having a networked home do not seem to be very significant. People will just have to pay some extra dollars for the chips, the connection to internet and the security to protect the system against pirating. The mainteinace will not have to be afforded because the services will repair themselves. The author concludes that the money that people will not mean much considering benefits of having a smart house.

Paragraph # 2: Monica has sent her summary to the evaluative committee of the magazine "Tesol Quarterly" to be considered for future publication. However, it was sent back because the word limit was 115.

(1) This study went through over 1,600 marginal and end comments written on 110 drafts of essays by 47 university ESL advanced students, considering the pragmatic goals and the linguistic features of each comment. (2) Draft of each individual essay were examined to observe the influence of the first draft commentary on the students´revisions and assess the changes that were made in response to the teacher´s feedback improve the essays. (3) A significant proportion of the comments led to substantive student revision, and there were particular types of commentary that were more helpful than others. (4) The final results are suggestive of several important implications for L2 writing instruction and for future studies on a vital neglected topic.